Peer editing (comments) 2

This is my analysis of my friend, Cheryl Chong's blog: http://myfoodielove.blogspot.com/

With the many pictures and details that Cheryl has in her blog, it makes it very clear to whoever is reading it. It also shows how she used to think and after doing this performance task and the assessments, how she realises that what she used to think was in fact, wrong. Although the blog is well-organised and the points were generally present, certain parts could have been further elaborated on to make it even clearer to readers as to the points she is trying to bring across.